Useless Sentence Introduction

Sometimes a writer can really slow down a sentence or paragraph by including useless words in the beginning.  Often, you can remove the introductory two or three words and not change the meaning of the sentence.

For instance, someone writes: As a matter of fact, it is likely that once an employee has received an initial promotion, he will do better work.  The writer may think the words, as a matter of fact, helped them get from one thought to another, but they haven't. 

They simply made the reader read five extra words before getting to the meat of the sentence.  So take those words out and write: "it is likely that once an employee has received an initial promotion he will do better work."

Unnecessary Beginning

Be that as it may, today there are a few wholesalers who serve book retailers.

Good Communication

Today there are few wholesalers who serve book retailers.

Unnecessary Beginning

In a like manner, Tom never goes on dates.

Good Communication

Tom never goes on dates.

Unnecessary Beginning

It is well-known that the sun sets in the west.

Good Communication

The sun sets in the west.

Unnecessary Beginning

It should be noted that you don't have to quit to get unemployment benefits.

Good Communication

You don't have quit to get unemployment benefits.

Unnecessary Beginning

In short, if you want somebody to do something, you must tell him.

Good Communication

If you want somebody to do something you have to tell him